You have made a good start here and you have learnt to use Prezi well. However, the presentation is full of spelling and grammatical errors and it seems to have been rushed in places - it certainly has not been checked through!
To improve: - check spelling, punctuation and grammar throughout - lots more needed on audience, e.g., who / what type of person would buy fairtrade? use your audience terms (you say the advert is for younger audiences and mention children but do they know about / care about fairtrade?) - you say that animation has less angles than a realist narrative... check this - lots more needed on camera angles (and shot types, editing, sound, graphics etc) - what else do trees and clouds (outdoors) make us think of? - your Ofcom information isn't quite right and you need more of it - print screen relevant sections of the ASA code - add a reference list.
Dan,
ReplyDeleteYou have made a good start here and you have learnt to use Prezi well. However, the presentation is full of spelling and grammatical errors and it seems to have been rushed in places - it certainly has not been checked through!
To improve:
- check spelling, punctuation and grammar throughout
- lots more needed on audience, e.g., who / what type of person would buy fairtrade? use your audience terms (you say the advert is for younger audiences and mention children but do they know about / care about fairtrade?)
- you say that animation has less angles than a realist narrative... check this
- lots more needed on camera angles (and shot types, editing, sound, graphics etc)
- what else do trees and clouds (outdoors) make us think of?
- your Ofcom information isn't quite right and you need more of it
- print screen relevant sections of the ASA code
- add a reference list.
EllieB